It builds,
It builds.
Waiting for relief.
Momentarily the feeling
ends.
Only to build again.
Greater, greater
As your eyes grow larger.
The tingle.
The twitch.
Waiting,
Waiting.
Look into the light.
The brightest light.
Hold your breath,
Close your eyes,
Here it comes.
The relief,
Eyes shut,
Tighter,
The sound.
Achooo
Achooo
God Bless..
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sounds like a cold to me nice flash 55 welcome to the club I'm posted and up just follow the link provided below.
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thanks Larry
That was a very clever post. You have described the intense relief one feels after sneezing perfectly.
ha. you knoe one of the absolute worst things for me is to sneeze. ack. cant stand it...nice 55 though.
mine is up!
Stopping by and following from Friday Follow, hope you can drop by. Have a happy weekend!
You got me with this one, I thought you were building an orgasm.
Secretia
Me too -- thought you were 'peaking.'
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Nicole
Happy follow friday. i am your newest follower. I loved the name of your blog. I have grabbed your button. Have a fantastic weekend
Welcome relief indeed!
(offers a tissue)
Excellent 55 My Dear..
(wipes VL's snot from my shirt)
Thank You for this germ filled post, You Rock Baby!
Have a Kick Ass and Dry Nose Week-End...G
:P
How original and creative. Loved this 55.
PG
My mind went elsewhere. What does that say about me?
Hah! I knew it was going to be a sneeze. :)
Fun 55.
Okay, since many are taking a crack at something besides a sneeze; leave it to the Buzzard to think about a bowel movement.
My 55: A Familiar Face
Or a big fart in aisle 9 at Walmart.
cool,
loved the poem so much!
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/03/12/55-when-i-turn-on-my-pc/
my first 55,
I would love for you to take a look!
ah ha,,,I had no idea where it was going till the very end, loved it;)
This is hilarious, I was trying to think what it was you were talking about and I never would have guessed! LOL
You got me chuckling on this one. Love it. My 55 is HERE .
Perfection!!!
A perfect sneeze. Wonderful.
Flash 55 - Avian Love
three paragraphs in - my eyes were growing larger, wondering, is she really going THERE? than i read the bright light part.
all in all great descriptive piece!
Perfect description...thanks for stopping by my blog!!
Why the hell does looking into the light make you sneeze, anyway!?
Ditto to a few others- I so thought this was about sex!
Great description of a sneeze! Thanks for visiting mine :)
That was fun and clever and sure had me feeling like I was about to....sneeze.
Once again, brilliant!
I love your Flash 55 series.
Which is EXACTLY why a sneeze is like an orgasm. It builds, it builds...ah...sweet relief. ;) Also? Neither can be done with your eyes open. It's impossible.
I love how you can get such a clear picture across in just 55 words. That's a gift. Can you teach that to my mother-in-law?
nice one - having been attacked by two colds over the last few weeks I can relate. When you get to the point when people no longer say 'bless you' at work you know you're in trouble
Oh, you are a good one! This was great. And as someone who just finally kicked a cold, you nailed this one.
Bless you. New to follow friday
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Hi there!
We are already fans/followers of your blog! Just stopping by to check things out and say hello! Come on over and visit the Freely Living Life Family when you get a free moment. Have a fantastic weekend! <3
Ha! Wondered where you were going with that one for a moment...
SO not the ending I as expecting. Ah ha ha
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